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  1. I get this. It's like, if you're the only person visibly struggling with something, it's easy to think of it as personal failure rather than something that's overall difficult. Knowing other people go through it also opens avenues to ask others how they get past it (just like this thread, lol).
  2. Thousands of years ago, a great evil terrorised the land. It destroyed cities and homes. A hero imprisoned it for it's crimes, and the story was passed down through legend. Little do modern people know, this great evil is still alive, and was actually just a young but extremely powerful being that had an error in judgement. It greatly regrets what it did.
  3. All three, in exactly the order you listed them and with varying emphasis. I usually linger on the "tear your hair out" and "fix it, somehow" stages. The "ignore it" lasts about long enough for me to have a hot chocolate. Fixing it isn't easy and sometimes I abandon the project for a little while to give myself time to think, but when I care about the project I really want to fix the plot holes and broken logic.
  4. Welcome to the forum! Can't wait to hear about your trilogy.
  5. Welcome to the forum, Fisch! You've come to the right place for some inspiration and feedback. I hope we do help.
  6. While I agree that grey characters aren't always the type of villain you want, I do want to point out that psychopaths, sociopaths, and narcissists aren't inherently evil people. Based on their lack of ability to empathise and the egos of narcissists and psychopaths, they are more likely to do bad things but they're even more likely to lead normal lives. The majority of psychopaths become bankers or CEOs. They're also very good as firefighters and surgeons. Just writing an evil villain off as a psychopath doesn't actually do enough to cover why they're doing what they are doing.
  7. Welcome to the forum! Gavriil sounds like a sweetheart, I hope he learns to look after himself a bit better, and I love the sound of the world you're writing. To help with the lack of new Dragon Age, a game called Greedfall is coming out tomorrow that's supposed to be very similar. A fantasy RPG game with collectable and romanceable companions where you can chose your playstyle and all that. I can't promise it's good since it's not even out yet but you could check it out.
  8. Given how much work I'm putting into it now, I'm probably gonna try for a first draft of Caerwen. That, or finally start the second draft of In Orbit. Hopefully I'll find time between that and getting used to life at uni.
  9. Welcome, DarkestFear! You're WIP sounds very interesting, can't wait to hear more about it!
  10. Kids works perfectly then, since it's urban fantasy. I always describe this story as a mix between Percy Jackson, the Raven Cycle, and the Mabinogi. I also prefer the connotations of kids, since to me at least it conveys a more chaotic energy. I've been thinking over the magician thing since Losebow mentioned it, but I'm still stuck. While I agree that "magician" does bring to mind a stage magician to some people, all other magic titles have implications that don't fit. Like, witch is either evil or essentially a magical herbalist, mage feels like it belongs in an RPG. The closest is wizard, which doesn't work since it implies a wisdom Brienne definitely lacks and she would shirk it for so many reasons (including the male implications and the fact that most wizards in Welsh myth range from neutral to evil). I chose magician in the first place because it's an umbrella term that covers all magic users without being inaccurate, though it just occurred to me that Brienne would 100% learn stage magic too. If you know any terms that fit well given everything above, I would be more than happy to hear them. The reason for Kieran's stay may be a bit complicated to share in just the blurb, but working in some information about Kieran himself shouldn't be too hard. That's a very good point. I think your paragraph there is much better, though I may change it just for flow reasons. Oh god it's so frustrating when that happens! Caerwen Chronicles is still kind of in pre-draft 1 stage, so I'll change that to better reflect what will happen once I figure it out myself. As for the bigger threat, I also didn't know what it was when I wrote the blurb (I knew I needed one for at least two character's arcs, though). Now I do know who she is, so thank you for reminding me to update the blurb with more accurate details.
  11. Make your main character a typical Everyman*! Everyone can relate to a straight, cis, white man with no real skills or character development! *I know this isn't what an Everyman actually is, but God, so many people write them as this.
  12. I agree with everything above. Even all the other character's arcs and goals seem to be strongly related to Alana. I'd suggest tying a later part of the blurb back to her main goal, too. Everything about her brother kind of stops mattering after the second line.
  13. I think an "ends justify the means" mentality works well for grey protagonists. You can sympathise with their goals while hating their methods. Depending on their severity, these characters could vary from heroes, to anti-heroes, to outright villains if their methods are vile enough. The more heroic versions of them can have a very Robin Hood vibe when their goals are to help others. While I love characters like this, I don't really have any. When writing, I tend to lean towards semi-Noblebright themeing. The closest I have is a noir-like PI who cheats, lies to, and sometimes even (temporarily) brainwashes people to get what she wants. I don't really write much with her, though. For a villain, even if they're completely despicable, giving them something good they care about gives them the layers you're talking about. A villain can try to kill the hero all they want, but if they go out of their way to keep children safe, there's gonna be some greyness there. @Penguinball I love the sound of a villain who tries her best to be an actually good mother. I feel like villainous parents never have that as a redeeming quality even if they are supposed to be sympathetic.
  14. So, following the advice of those very helpful websites @Penguinball linked us to in the challenge thread, I have written a blurb for my eternal long time project, The Caerwen Chronicles. Any and all feedback welcome!