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    Multiple POV characters/chapter question

    Which page contains the section you're interested in? @Jedi Knight Muse I do it now and again, maybe three or four times throughout the book in several chapters.
  2. Well I am partial to a seductive first line (of book, chapter, anything) so I try and give it as much in as short a space as I can. In those lines, I don't shy away from telling, I try and portray time and setting and mood, to position the reader, and using stronger words and images to offset any more generic ones. The workaday business of dialogue can come later. Here's a couple of examples: Hope this helps.
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    Multiple POV characters/chapter question

    I don't think it would throw me off. I switch POVs a fair bit even in a chapter, and sometimes even dip into others' heads while I'm in another char's POV section. I just like the old-fashioned style that supports it, and I do it in a number of places, though I suspect the day will come where I'll have to cut those bits. It's a little hard to say whether it works here because I don't have the context - all I see is Kassel's POV. As for the scene in general, I like it. I like the depth it goes into for Kassel and the world. And - joy of joys - you have kept your sentence structure varied. I am beta reading some stuff at the moment and while there are many enjoyable parts, five consecutive sentences going "X was a Y, subordinating to the Z" is a bit much :)
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    Age of main characters

    Great question. My MC starts out at 20 (she notes that it is her 21st at one point), and while I was conscious of this bias such that I included several key supporting characters aged 40~ish and 51, and older, the MC and her allies tended to be young. I really don't know why this is and need to dig deep a little. Is it because they're better looking? Because they represent some innocence within us? Because a typical 40-something yomping through fantasy dragonland is a hard aesthetic to pull off? Maybe. I dunno. My MC's age just seemed right. The person it was based on was about that age at the key time anyway. Challenge accepted, I guess 🙂
  5. I'm going to work on The Dire Queen. I'm about 62K words in and feel I've barely started. I have a reasonable idea of where I want it to go but I want to really deep dive into epic fantasy elements. The first book focused on characters and themes - and I will keep that - but I feel the deep immersion in the world was not as developed as I would like. It was also pretty human-centric. Now I want readers to get snared into a fabulous world and be bewitched by beguiling races. Magic will be explored further and incredible creatures will feature. The world as we know it is to be left firmly behind.
  6. In terms of writing, I love the fact that you can make any place or vision real via the medium of the fantasy novel. In terms of reading, I love the fact that you can go to all these far flung places where fantastical stuff happens. There's not much I dislike about the genre other than the proliferation of derivative work, themes, ideas etc. But even those I quite like :)
  7. I enjoy the Steampunk aesthetic - sorry, the æsthetic - but I often wonder how best to translate that into a novel? Clearly there is going to be some setting to it; a Steampunk novel set in some far future is going to have a challenge on its hands that something which draws on Victorian London may not. There's the add-ons, the brassy science - the cogs, the automatons, the fabulous flying contrivances and the curiosities that lurk just below our normal sightline, peeping up when they think we aren't watching. What else? To me, the simple style of the language is a big part of it, or at least it should be. I struggle a little to buy into it if it is not written in the style of Charles Dickens or Jane Austin or somebody like that. Eagle-eyed readers will observe that I have chosen the Georgia font today; that's because in my view typeface selection can underpin the look-and-feel. Names. Names are a big part of it. I love that tradition of mixing odd names with common ones - Inigo Jones, Heironymous P. Bosch. Those sorts of names make me want to read loads more about them. Thoughts on what really "makes" a steampunk novel?
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    Daydreaming, Stories, and You

    Until about ten years ago, my daydreams had pretty much got out of hand. It seemed that, while friends and colleagues were making giant strides in their careers, I was merely getting by. Yes, I had some of the trappings of achievement. Yes, I put up a reasonably convincing front about it, but all the while I hid a terrible secret. I was... I was ... I was a secret daydreamer. And not just that; I had ... I had ... I had ... say it ... I had imaginary friends. No. I had a whole imaginary life. I was Walter Mitty, I was every self-deluded loon, and my fantasies frequently took far more of my concentration than the day-to-day drudge of real life, which - though it had perks aplenty - was bland and unfulfilling in comparison. Even as I attended meetings and flew to customer sites, I was an intergalactic space captain, I was a warrior astride a giant winged beast, I was rocking the main stage in some far-flung metropolis before the adoring millions. I thought I was ill. How long, I wondered in desperation - how long can any sane adult maintain such deception and not take some deficit to their health, be it mental, physical or financial? Something had to give. Then I discovered writing, everything fell into place, and here we are 🙂 Without my daydreams I would have absolutely nothing to write about, and it scares me when they fall quiet.
  9. Blasphemy? Heresy? Madness? Not at all! Why not share some non-fantasy books you've read and enjoyed, and what you got out of them? I'm reading The Muse by Jessie Burton (she of The Miniaturist) right now, and I love her attention to detail with the little quirks and observations of her characters. That's definitely something that's feeding into my own WIPs.
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    Reading outside the fantasy genre?

    Ah yep my wife cites that as one of her favourite reads. I'll have a go at it someday. I love a bit of steampunk. And Lin-Manuel Miranda - for some reason I am seeing that guy's name everywhere recently. I mean he's very talented but I'm starting to get to the point of asking: what does this mean? What am I being told? And I'm really not the sort that asks that question alot. :) I've already seen Mary Poppins Returns (it's great by the way!) so what more does L2M want of me? :) Great responses by the way guys. Keep 'em flowing
  11. May have been asked before; gonna need an answer. 🙂
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    Handling class in your writing

    How do you deal with different classes of characters in your stories, or the concept of class in general? Is there a layer of aristocracy sitting on the merchant classes, that rests in turn on the backs of the workers, or have you reimagined the whole thing? Are people defined by what they do, à la mage, rogue, warrior, and so forth? Or is your world classless, or something new? Does your writing draw from a particular strata?
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    What does your story’s currency say about your world? Is it straightforward mining of rare metals or is there something else of value that people barter with? How are the denominations named? https://www.independent.co.uk/money/how-the-worlds-currencies-got-their-names-a6939431.html
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    I keep losing track of my currency. I have to make sure that what one young person pays for, say, a train ticket, isn't the same as what a wealthy guildmaster pays for a royal bribe. I have a list. Slightly worryingly I may have lost it...
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    Handling class in your writing

    This sounds great. A lot of fantasy seems to me to concern people who happen to be royalty or aristos or have some connection to a notional throne. All of which is fine and dandy, but as you say, what of the underclass in such environments? What of the workers and general populus? I'm interested in the washerwoman who has to mop up goblin guts as well as make ends meet. What does the postman, whose daily run is punctuated by the flurry and rush of a passing war-dragon, think about his world? What is the impact of magic on the streets?
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    Neurodivergence in fantasy

    I really enjoyed the character of Thick in Robin Hobb's Farseer trilogy. The impression readers get is that he has Downs, and alongside that he is just a very well-realised character.
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    I love a bit of medieval fantasy and the notion of a lady singing with wolves is cool. That said I am going to pass on beta for now, as I need to be sure that all the editing that could be done has been before committing. Looking at this extract, a couple of things you might want to focus on are: - dialogue punctution; eg: Lord Hammond grunted,[<- a comma sort of works here but it's not a common style of dialogue tagging, so you need the voice to really be able to pull it off] “All right then. Now what is this about Bishop Talrop?” “Now that’s a surprise. With the way he was spouting at me I was sure he would have come to you about it already,” [lower case s->]She said. - mixing styles. This extract is a little too talking heasdy for me. The dialogue itself is fine, but mix it up so it's not all just talk. Immerse me in the world and the POV character's perceptions as the dialogue happens. You do this with the desk but try a little more. Eg (and apologies for adding in stuff that's going to be irrelevant for your story but this is simply to illustrate what I mean.): Lord Hammond grunted. “All right then. Now what is this about Bishop Talrop?” “Now that’s a surprise. With the way he was spouting at me I was sure he would have come to you about it already,” she said. Sunlight streamed in between the linen drapes, the ones that her father had carried back from the war. “And what exactly has he been spouting about?” Elizabeth waved her hand. She wanted to confess all, to get back at Talrop for all the things he had done. “Oh, something about me being a Lady of Blackstone and my nightly singing was going to cause me to have my soul burn for all eternity because of it.” “Singing?" Lord Hammond frowned. "You mean that howling you do out in the woods every night? What harm could that possibly cause?” He shook his head and sat back at his desk. “Though he does make a point. It’s not natural for a Lady to be singing to wolves.”
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    Subverting Fantasy Tropes

    I quite enjoy conventional fantasy tropes but with a little twist; eg I have an asthmatic knight who doesn’t like to ride horses but who slays a dragon using explosives.
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    Story Titles

    They sound pretty good. I like the succinctness of them. "Darkness of Light" I might think was tipping the balance to a little too much, but by and large there's an evocativeness there. Maybe try and make the chapters suggest the changing of the tone in the story, particularly towards the end. Think drama, think buildup.
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    Overused tropes that you're totally using anyway

    I wouldn’t burn too much time on it. Tropes are tools and not necessarily to be avoided.
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    Overused tropes that you're totally using anyway

    Finished MS 1 has The Most Left Justified of left-justified fantasy maps. Add to that Rags to royalty, Magnificent Bastard - it's all there. To a point it is quite hard to avoid tropes. But I have tried to subvert them when I can - for eg the LJFM will have a land bridge (and there's probably a trope for that too!). I do tend to enjoy writing to the Hearing Voices and related similar tropes and I do it alot; it is just an interesting subject, to me.
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    Character replies

    ~ Hammerstyle rolls forward on the seat of his chair, crackling the wicker like autumn flames on a cold night. A deep rumble emits from deep within him, as though he is part man, part ghastly mechanical contrivance, just starting up and readying to set about some awful purpose. A specter of a dying smile plays about his jawline before vanishing entirely. "I don't," he says in a low tremor, "talk about my family." There's a pause. Then, abruptly, he sits back and his countenance changes, his searching eyes blue and friendly. Such is the switch that one could believe the previous comment never happened. "My friends are my family," he says breezily. "And as you saw last night, they are many and - " But once more his voice drops back to its trouser-flapping register " - they are very, very much-loved." His hands link together, forming up into ranks of cavalry. "Now," he says. One broad finger points. "What would be your dream vacation?" ~
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    Howdy oh fellow writers

    Welcome aboard Xanthuss/Isaac. I'll be sure to check out both Gail Carriger and Worldanvil ... though I probably ought to get some work done first 🙂
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    Character replies

    ~ Echo thought. How did she know? Did she know? Was she qualified to answer this question? Images swam up behind her eyes, of Ixawod and others, and to her dismay she found herself well-enough disposed towards them, but nothing that would prompt the words in love. She thought of Kenny the Swarhelian and her stomach did a curious movement, a little flip that she didn't have a word for. "I should imagine it's a bit like being hungry," she said at length, picking a runaway strand on her town dress, "but for people instead of food." On the wall behind her was scrawled another question. She wasn't going to answer it. Someone else would have to bear that honour. It read: what is the most embarrassing thing you have done? ~
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    Map Making

    I like the idea of a setting that has - gasp! - no coastline.